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本帖最后由 djt000 于 2013-10-14 16:59 编辑
Love never leaves me. My parents, teachers, classmates and so on give love to me. My mother always come to my room and close the windows when I fall asleep on the cold night. My classmates and teachers always give me a hand when I have something difficult to do. I feel very warm and happy when I get love from all these people around me. I will give my father a cup of tea when he finish all the works. I will help my mother to do some housework. Love around me all the time.【实际得分情况:7+5+0=12】
老师点评:要点一个不缺,7分到手。全文除了反复使用when引导的时间状语从句之外,无任何复杂句型,因此文采分为0并不冤枉。我要说的是被扣掉得2分语言分,不知道大家有没有看出来扣在哪里?
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